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31 October 2009

The boy who wanted to b GOD.....


(guys this is my first attempt at innovative writting . i have beeen working on this since quite sometime now ,in the past few days i have had a lot of free time at the hospital which heped me complete this story of mine.

i know its stilll raw n i know it doesn makes much sense,,but i hope u guys will like it ,,,!!!)

The boy who wanted to b GOD.....

ther was a small boy once ... he hated school ..he loved to dance .. sometimes he liked drawin as well
one day the teacher was asking everyone what they wanted to be .some wanted to be cricketers
some wanted to be actors but this boy ,,, this boy, he wanted to be GOD ..
he said " i want to be god .. God has the best job in the world ...he can do ne thing ..'
they all told him he can't be god but he refused to accept ..
y not ? he wud argue ...
if the person who is god now can be god y cant i ??
he was stubborn
he had fire in his eyes ...
n the will to fight .. ,,, fight for what he thinks is right ..

as he grew up ..he found that at every step ther wer both people, ones who wanted to hold him back n the ones who wanted to help him grow .
at every steps he had two clear choices .. two clear paths to follow
the wrong ones more so often were the easy ones that were lucrative ..n the right ones usually were the ones which wer the hardest path to walk ...
he always tried to twalk the right path .. he always tried to help others on his way ,,
he always tried to do what god what do .
and even though if u ask me he was doing way too much from our standards ... he was still unhappy bout not being able do everything . like god cud ..
no matter how big an achivement he wud make the wolrd wud still have a lot of bad in it to
make it feel real negligible
n then it began
he started to get tired of this world ..
his fire had started to burn out
the fight in him seemd to get smaller day by day ..
n then one day finally he got fed up ,.,
standing on the terrace he looked up at the sky n "I GIVE UP ... I CANT BE U GOD ..!!!
I THOUGHT I CUD DO BETTR THAN U .. I THOUGHT I CUD ERADICATE POVERTY N UNHAPPINESS FROM THE WORLD ... I THOUGHT I CUD FILL THIS WORLD WITH LOVE ...BUT I DIDNT REALISE U WER BEYOND HUMAN .. N HOW CUD I DO IN JUST ONE LIFE TIME WHAT U CUDN IN SO MANY LIFE SPANS ."
n then it happened
the sky went dark .. n the winds started blowing
n time stoped ..N then lightinig struck n he cud hear the voice now .. it was god's voice n it said .."OH DEAR SON OF MINE ...!!! I HAVE TO TELL U SOME THING .LISTEN CAREFULLY ..WE INVENT THINGs WHEN WE NEED TO ACHIEVE THAT WHAT WE CANT NORMALLY DO,,
LIKE U GUYS BUILT CARS SO THAT U CUD TRAVEL AT SPEEDS WHICH U CUDN ACHIEVE OTHERIWSE
SIMILARLY I BUILT U GUYS TO DO THINGS THAT I CANT ...!!!
SO DONT GIVE UP ...
DONT LEAVE IT ON ME ...!!!.. I M GOD . BUT U R HUMANS ..i made u n i m telling u
U CAN ACHIEVE N E THING UR MIND PERCIEVES ".....

18 comments:

  1. NIce piece...
    keep it up..

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  2. how beautifully you just described the greatness, the huge extent of greatness of human beings...

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  3. wuhoooooooooooooooo aman. writing toh superhot hoti ja rahi hai. hehe. way to go cheechad! :)

    p.s. just. don't. you know. don't loose your sanity in the process, okay! :P good luck!

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  4. hahahahaha
    that was fucking stupid!!!
    the buildup was great, but when "god" finally started speaking..........lol

    so apparently we can do anything we want?
    why dont u start by learning a bit more about God and his so called Limitations.

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  5. lol,,,,i was waitin for one o u . !!!!
    finally someone found it stupid ....!!!
    but y r u anonymous ,, u coward ..

    n e wyzz yeah i rushed thourgh the end . cudn realli figure out a nice end actually ...
    but the message ta i wanted to give has reached out to u rightly ..
    n u disagree..
    tats eaxactly the audience i had aimed this story at...
    dude GOd has limitations .. n he has created us to sovle those.. u can laugh at it .. i used to too ...!! but its true ..

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  6. ohh is it?
    can you name one one of those limitations?
    and if u possibly can, how is man able to live up 2 them?

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  7. dude god cant come on this earth . he has to take a human form ...to do so ...

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  8. in a way we r god's way to come to this earth ,,,!!
    n enjoy the world which he cannot in his natural form ...
    he cant perform miracles from up ther ...we can ....!!

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  9. he neeeds us to perform his miracles from up ther ...n tats wat this story is bout ,,,,
    its bout don blame god ,,,,
    he cant do n e thing bout it from up ther
    onli we can ...!!1

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  10. nicely written..
    i almost jumped when i saw your new topic on my blog..finally the much hyped topic is there.. hehe

    its good.. but you could have done away with the rhyming words and shakespearean tone!..
    but beautiful none the less..!

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  11. yes the much hyped post is here ..m glad u guys liked it ...

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  12. vishal (the anonymous guy)November 1, 2009 at 10:46 AM

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    ur telling me that coming on earth is a miracle?

    the one who created this earth and thousands of other planets much greater than earth falls inferior to a human, on grounds that he cant come to earth

    have you really thought this through?

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  13. dont take it in a wrong perspective .man ...!!
    i did not say tat God is inferior ...!!!
    no i never meant tat GOD iS In NE WAY INFERIOR TO US HUMANS ...!! he after all created us....

    but he cant come on earth n perform our miracles for us ...he needs us to to da tat for him is wat the story says....!!!
    the story is asking us to stop blaming him for all that is bad going on out here ..
    cause the truth is ...ta if ther is n e one who can do n e thing bout it is us ,,, n not him ...!!
    he has much bigger isssuses to worry bout ,,

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  14. in a way what i m trying to say . is wat god wants us to know is ..we can do n e thing jus like he can ..!!
    so we shud go ahead n do what ever comes to our mind n not stop oursleves from doing so ,,
    cause we r a part of god himslef after all ,get the point ...


    okie okie i agree the part wher god tlks is dumb ..!! my fault ...!!!

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  15. Great start, but somewhat bizarre ending. Somewhat like Chetan Bhagat's second book. Keep Posting!

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  16. dude wrong commenet at the wrong post i think ....!!

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so ...wat do u think ...??
was it worth the effort